8 February 2012, 4:50 am
Im 12 and i wrote this story as something to do, i don't really know how good it is as i haven't really wrote before so be nice! i know i have already posted it but i want some more opinions! this is chapter 1! I heard the flap of the mail box whilst I was eating my breakfast, I was expecting issue 3 of the advanced geometry magazine so I decided to wander down and get it. I lifted up the rusty red flap and was surprised to see only one letter lying there. I picked it up and fingered the red envelope I flipped it over and read the address aloud: Mr Matthew Parks 32 Mahogany Drive Redshire Kent CT8 9RTV Curious I wondered, who would be writing to me. I ripped open the blood red envelope but caught the inside of my little finger on the sharp corner. Bright red liquid dripped from my finger as I wavered it helplessly over the mail box. Paper cuts stung I hated them! Wandering indoors I pulled out an official looking printed note with a large picture of a finger, more curious I thought to myself as I began to read: Matthew, It is time you are told what you are and who you are, your family are waiting for you here and everything will be explained soon. Don’t panic you are not alone, Just put your finger on the portal below and close your eyes, it will happen quickly. Will be seeing you in a matter of seconds so there’s no need for goodbyes. Vi x I don’t know why I did it; any normal person would have thrown the letter in the bin thinking it was a prank. But I placed my finger on the metallic blue picture, my finger tingles with anticipation and matched the image, in a millisecond I was gone! I closed my eyes as I felt a buzzing drown me I spun and rotated, I had no idea which way was up and which was down but I didn’t open my eyes. I suppose I was scared what I might see; I knew I was travelling to the unknown. I knew something very strange was about to happen but I wasn’t scared I was almost…excited. It ended as quickly as it had happened and I suddenly jolted forward and felt my feet hit a hard surface. With great anticipation I opened my eyes but what I saw was as extraordinary as I feared. I was in some type of hall surrounded by giant images of men all in the same black uniform in the centre was a giant fountain with what looked like millions of tiny clocks at the bottom where the pennies usually would be. In the top right corner of the hall stood a giant statue of an old balding man with a gleaming gold medal around the plaster neck bearing a giant letter N. the wallpaper was something different it showed tiny images of millions and millions of people all with the same N medal only in silver and bronze. My brow started to furrow where was I? I felt like I was dreaming and had to pinch myself a few times just to check that I wasn’t. I felt a gentle tap on my shoulder; I jumped and whipped my head round to face a tall weedy looking man. He had a messenger bag slung over his shoulder and tattered blue suit on his body. He gave me a cheesy yet welcoming smile and exclaimed: “Hullo Matthew! Welcome to the peace land” his voice was high pitched and excitable. “Errrrmmm… sorry but what’s going on” I stuttered nervously he acted like he hadn’t heard what I said and continued: “I’m Taddie, I’m the netoply official messenger and I love my job” he started to run and bounce around like a 6 year old. “Woohoo” he exclaimed spinning round in a circle. I laughed and laughed until: BANG! He fell into the gleaming fountain! “Ohhhh Taddie, not again” I looked to see a blond women running towards him and pulling him out of the glistening blue water” “Hey you must be Matthew, sorry about him he gets a bit over excited” she laughed turning to shake my hand. Just a bit! “Sorry, but you couldn’t tell me what’s going on could you?” “Ahhh, I knew that question would pop up but unfortunately I’m not the right person to explain but I know who is com`on!” She started to walk towards a large green opening, beckoning me to follow. I hesitated I would have liked to have stayed in the hall I felted safer there. “Hey, you wanted to know what’s going on.” I followed her this time, she led me through numerous doors and passageways many with complicated locks and codes. She must have seen my confused expression as she said: “Don’t worry your find your away around soon” What! Did she mean I would be here for a long time, I needed to get home! I had my biology exam on Monday. My Thoughts were interrupted as we approached a large glistening glass door with a golden plaque bearing the name Prof. Manterlie (Head Netoply of The Peace Land) She knocked nervously as a loud voice boomed: “ENTER!” She opened the door timidly and ushered me in, I found my heart starting to race and sweat pricked the back of my neck. there is more but i dont have enough space! what do you think, be nice i know its not great :) I also know that my punctuation and grammar isn't the best, but that's something im working on! like i said im 12 and haven't really write a lot until now :D... Read More »
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